Friday, August 22, 2014

The Query That Got Me My Agent

Okay, I tried to post a link to the query that got me my agent on the #pitchwars thread, but people had difficulty opening up the Absolute Write thread. So here it is - I especially wanted to share it because quieter contemporary stories can be a little tricky to query. The stakes aren't as dramatic, but they still have to be clear and compelling. This got me eleven requests and one amazing agent. Let me know if you have any questions!



When eleven-year-old Natalia is chosen as a special guide to new girl Winnie, she’s thrilled. She’s never singled out for anything, unlike her siblings, who are all prodigies at something, even if it’s just being adorable (like two-year-old Claude). But now Natalia gets to show Winnie around, and Winnie’s not just new—she’s also blind.

Winnie’s blindness is soon the least interesting thing about her. Winnie and Natalia both love show tunes, hate snobby Hayden Marcos, and Winnie doesn’t even seem to mind Natalia’s chaotic household (complete with constant bagpipe practice, a boy named Rat, and a glass bottomed boat in the backyard).

When it comes time to choose an Afterschool Annex class, Natalia’s ready. She’s been yearning to do Dance Team for years. But then awful Hayden starts closing in. If Natalia doesn’t choose an activity she can do with Winnie, Hayden will swoop in and steal her away, just like she stole Natalia’s previous best friend. If Natalia seizes the chance to shine like her siblings, she may risk the best friendship she’s ever had.

WHY THE WOLF WEARS LIP GLOSS, AND OTHER LEGENDS OF THE SIXTH GRADE is a 41,000-word middle grade contemporary that may appeal to fans of THE BRILLIANT FALL OF GIANNA Z or EMMA JEAN LAZARUS FELL OUT OF A TREE. 

7 comments:

  1. Love it! Interesting characters, and the stakes are so clear. (I have a hard time really making the stakes clear in my "quiet" stories -- this is a great example for me. Thanks for posting it!)

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  2. This is wonderful! Thank you so much for sharing this! The stakes are clear, the voice is present, and the details adorable!

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  3. Thanks so much for sharing. This example helps. It is harder to show stakes with a more quiet story.

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    1. It is much trickier, but I love those quieter stories myself!

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  4. Great query! This sounds like a wonderful story. Best of luck with it and thanks for sharing.

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